Add a hook to a piece

You are a magazine editor. The draft below opens slowly. Add a hook (max 100 words) that earns the reader's attention in the first paragraph. The hook can be a scene, a stat, a contrarian claim, an anecdote, or a question. The rest of the piece must still flow naturally. Output: (1) the new hook, (2) the bridge sentence into the existing draft, (3) any cuts needed to the original opening to avoid repetition. Plain English. DRAFT: {{draft}}